写作初稿--引发的思考draft(2016-12-04 09:59)

这篇文章写的是如何写作初稿, 其中有几句话简直醍醐灌顶, 引发了写随笔的冲动:

1, “It makes no difference how you write, just so you do.”
2, “Be flexible. Your outline should smoothly conduct you from one point to the next, but do not permit it to railroad you.”
3, “Do not attempt to compose a perfectly correct draft the first time around.”

完美的京元

重点不是你怎么写, 而是你去写了. “The first draft will appear on the page only if you stop avoiding the inevitable and sit, stand up, or lie down to write.” 然而我一直以来不是这样的, 我太重视怎么写, 写的方式.

一直以来我对自己都很不满, 很自卑, 因为自己不完美. 在大二的时候, 有一个香港中文大学的关于潜能开发的老师来演讲, 我问她:”一个人能否做到无懈可击, 连他的草稿纸都是精湛的书法, 他的日常生活举动都是极其优雅的艺术, 一切都完美无瑕?” 她似乎被惊讶到了, 然后说:”我不能说没可能, 但你得花极其大的心力.” 于是我踏上了追求完美的旅程:

吃饭得坐端正
睡觉得嵌合所谓的”右躺标准睡姿”
写程序得先想好然后一次写成
答应了人就得做到, 而无论那是否符合对方的期许
在退出一个社团的时候, 为了公平, 就得把所有社团都退了
当班长答应了为人民服务, 就尽心尽责
说要绝交, 那就真绝交, 而不论那是否是玩笑或是无情
“十周健身计划”, 计划制定了就必须完成, 而无论那是否与”目标”背道而驰
开始恋情, 不是因为适合和她很好, 只是因为不小心牵了手, 就想负责一辈子
她说我只是为了她的美貌和身体, 所以我花了一个学期的时间学会了掌控性欲
最疯狂的一次莫过于40天没打飞机.
她说我上次没去考试给她留下了不好的印象, 所以我现在就考, 不论损失什么, 不论还能否追回来.
跟景清约好, 大四上学期结束前, 若没练出腹肌就给他1000块, 省吃俭用也还清了.

与其说追求物质上的利益和成功, 不如说我是在追求道德和个人历史痕迹上的完美无瑕.

选择? 完美:可能


然而, 所谓的完美, 其实是有悖论的. “完美的上帝能否造出一颗他自己举不起来的石头?” 这个问题在知乎上的一个回答是这样的:
看链接: https://www.zhihu.com/question/21397631/answer/21623614

我对这问题的逻辑没想得这么深入, 因为我甚至怀疑“逻辑”本身也不一定是可信的. 逻辑一旦崩溃, 一切意义都是虚无. 然后便回到荒诞了. 但我相信客观唯物论, 如若不然, 我将连基本的吃饭喝水都进行不了. 每一个个体, 每一时刻下, 可以发挥他的选择能力, 并且去执行, 然而, 你只能执行一种, 不妨称之为A选择, 即使时间能够倒退, 让你执行B选择, 你也只不过是执行了“先A后B”的选择罢了, “先B后A”的选择呢? 你还是没法经历全部的可能性. 没法经历全部, 那还是完美的人生吗?

我没系统地上过哲学课, 但我直觉告诉我, 这或许是这个世纪的哲学难题, 是量子力学中测不准原理对我学到的那些旧式哲学思维的撞击.

假设我现在刷题, 选择考上清华了, 是一个天才, 拿了诺贝尔奖或者图灵奖, 然后呢? 我损失了年轻去闯荡世界的可能性. 更何况考上后的所有可能的个人历史轨迹, 是很难预测的.

假设我选择休息, 然后明年去找工作了, 又会如何?  同样混沌.

然而不做选择与徘徊, 将自己置于庄子<</span>人间世>里所说的“托不得已以养中”, 那同样是你的一种选择, 也是未知的.

或许一定程度上, 在物质层面有规律可循可预测, 但是你的个人体验, 和将得到的心路历程, 是绝对无法假想的, 只有亲身体会过才知道.

当年和我毕业论文导师姜大志的讨论也是基于这点, 他劝我听话遵守 “社会教条” 去死守做一件事, 专注于一个领域. 然而我问他是否见过一个人一直善变下去的? 他说没有. 既然没有, 那怎么知道这样不行呢? 然后他让我十年后告诉他结果. 这同样是个束缚, 要是我上当了, 一直变下去, 就没法体会 “死守一件事”的感觉了, 相反, 我变得坚守一件事, 留下来考研, 即使考不上, 即使考上没意义也坚持. 不会那么傻再给自己设限掉入陷阱了.

人都是没法完美的, 因此, 我的自卑也就没必要了. 反正你再怎么 “完美”, 也没法做到经历一切, 即使你真的 “完美”了, 你也经历不了现在 “不完美”的轨迹.

到这儿, 我的哲学就到头了. 前方在何处?

社会实践是此刻的心之所向

“世界那么大, 我想去看看.”

高三养病的时候, 去旅游, 看到了很多工人, 早上起来上班, 下班, 娱乐. 然后娶妻, 生子, 养老, 死亡. 觉得我不想这样, 那没什么意思. 所以努力学习考上了个本科.

然而很懊悔, 没机会更加努力, 考上更好的大学. 所以毕业后才留下来考研, 想着不然人生后悔 (这也是动机之一, 另外几个是: 1纪念我那逝去的柏拉图式爱情, 2修养并整理哲学, 3懒惰).

但现在发现, 那种对人的一生的 “高度抽象”描述是不对的. 他们经历的喜怒哀乐, 不比你经历的少. 他们的人生经历, 比我们要丰富得多. 一个人的成长的衡量, 不仅仅是物质, 还要有灵魂的深度, 我的心理年龄就很小, 缺少阅历.

跟当年不同, 在备战的过程中想得愈发清楚, 考上清华当个科学家又如何? 倪匡小说<</span>卫斯理>系列中<</span>规律>所描述的, 那个为社会作出无数贡献的科学家, 看到了两幅一样的蜜蜂图后, 不是照样自杀了?

维特根斯坦为了哲学, 去服兵役, 在战争前线获得灵感; <</span>海上钢琴师>惧怕社会的琴键, 终身不下船, 与船葬身海底. 出不出象牙塔, 都是未知的, 那为何不选心向往的一个?

Follow your heart, 直觉告诉我, 想治好这虚无与荒诞的病, 得去参与社会实践.

走出象牙塔, 参与社会实践, 此后不再拘谨自卑, 赚钱给亲人好友买礼物, 和更多的人喝酒, 经历更多的新奇, 变得更成熟, 然后写作更多, 希望有一天可以找到答案.

附此英语阅读全文

The time for sharpening pencils, arranging your desk, and doing almost anything else instead of writing has ended. The first draft will appear on the page only if you stop avoiding the inevitable and sit, stand up, or lie down to write. It makes no difference how you write, just so you do. Now that you have developed a topic into a tentative thesis, you can assemble your notes and begin to flesh out whatever outline you have made.
Be flexible. Your outline should smoothly conduct you from one point to the next, but do not permit it to railroad you. If a relevant and important idea occurs to you now, work it into the draft. By using the first draft as a means of thinking about what you want to say, you will very likely discover more than your notes originally suggested. Plenty of good writers don't use outlines at all but discover ordering principles as they write. Do not attempt to compose a perfectly correct draft the first time around.Grammar, punctuation, and spelling can wait until you revise. Concentrate on what you are saying. Good writing most often occurs when you are in hot pursuit of an idea rather than in a nervous search for errors.

To make revising easier, leave wide margins and extra space between lines so that you can easily add words, sentences, and corrections. Write on only one side of the paper. Your pages will be easier to keep track of that way, and, if you have to clip a paragraph to place it elsewhere, you will not lose any writing on the other side.

If you are working on a word processor, you can take advantage of its capacity to make additions and deletions as well as move entire paragraphs by making just a few simple keyboard commands. Some software programs can also check spelling and certain grammatical elements in your writing. It's worth remembering, however, that though a clean copy fresh off a printer may look terrific-terrible, it will read only as well as the thinking and writing that have gone into it. Many writers prudently store their data on disks and print their pages each time they finish a draft to avoid losing any material because of power failures or other problems. These printouts are also easier to read than the screen when you work on revisions.

Once you have a first draft on paper, you can delete material that is unrelated to your thesis and add material necessary to illustrate your points and make your paper convincing. The student who wrote "The A&amp;P as a State of Mind" wisely dropped a paragraph that questioned whether Sammy displays chauvinistic attitudes toward women. Although this is an interesting issue, it has nothing to do with the thesis, which explains how the setting influences Sammy's decision to quit his job. Instead of including that paragraph, she added one that described Lengel's crabbed response to the girls so that she could lead up to the A &amp; P "policy" he enforces.

Remember that your initial draft is only that. You should go through the paper many times--and then again--working to substantiate and clarify your ideas. You may even end up with several entire versions of the paper. Rewrite. The sentences within each paragraph should be related to a single topic. Transitions should connect one paragraph to the next so that there are no abrupt or confusing shifts. Awkward or wordy phrasing or unclear sentences and paragraphs should be mercilessly poked and prodded into shape.

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